Wednesday, June 3

Burn And Break

How come every time I hope
It's a crusted shell
that cracks?

How come
I counterpoint myself
To stop right in my tracks?

I'm still running
You fell behind
And I'm no longer your helping hand
I have a bleeding heart now, to defend

You'd think that every time I'd learn
Edging on what aches

But I was never one to burn
And break

I'm still running
You fell behind
And I'm no longer your helping hand
I have a bleeding heart now, to defend

Before you I never ran
And took every arrow, proud
And every whisper was quiet
And never loud

You fell behind
I ran out of heart
Ran out of time

I'm still running
You fell behind
And I'm no longer your helping hand
I have a bleeding heart now

to defend

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Thought a lot about what to name this piece of lyrics, finally settled for the Burn And Break part of it, since none of the chorus seemed to convey the meaning of the song properly. D'you guys have any other ideas? Feel free to share.
POET in the JAR
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  1. RoccariJune 3, 2009 at 2:28 PM

    I would use "I´m still running" or "No longer your helping hand", but I think that "Burn and break" works also fine. but I have always difficulties when it comes to giving names to poems, so... ^^

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  2. Poet In The JarJune 3, 2009 at 4:45 PM

    Yeah, well thought of "Helping Hand" but it didn't sound as it fit in; and also thought Still Running, but I didn't feel like I was running, more like I was crashing... and so Burn and break it was. We'll see if it works in the long run :)

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  3. AyanJune 4, 2009 at 9:43 AM

    "How come every time I hope
    It's a crusted shell
    that cracks?

    How come
    I counterpoint myself
    To stop right in my tracks?"

    Nice Thoughts!! I love to think about these lines and visualize them in my head!

    About the name: I know naming is important for a poem to look good, but since I'm a total sucker at it... I won't tread those grounds :P
    The title "burn and break" is good enough! ;)

    cheers

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  4. ChelsJune 5, 2009 at 12:38 AM

    "But I was never one to burn
    And break"

    loving this , bex! :D goes on the favorites list! and , Actually, I wouldnt change the tittle, I think it's qpretty good !:D

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  5. SibylJune 5, 2009 at 7:40 PM

    "I ran out of heart"

    Nice expression!
    And I agree with the others about the time, it's good as it is ;P

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  6. Poet In The JarJune 8, 2009 at 6:56 AM

    Thanks, y'all. I'll leave the title then. :)

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