Say you knew me just a little better
Wouldn't you want to know
Wouldn't you have shaken me up
Wouldn't you have
woken me up
Say you cared just a little better
Wouldn't you hold that tongue
Wouldn't you have listened a bit
Wouldn't you have
bitten your lip
Send me another song of your liking,
Invite me along to another place
It doesn't matter, you can't save my face
I'm the coat of your sins you couldn't erase
Say you were friends of me
just a little bit better
Would it be any different at all
You'd still be looking down on me
from your piedestal
Say you were close to me
just a little bit closer
And that you were known to me
just a little bit closure
Wouldn't you have whispered
that there's no truth in rumours
Wouldn't you whisper
Send me another song of your liking,
Invite me along to another place
It doesn't matter, you can't save my face
I'm the coat of your sins you couldn't erase
Sugar coat your virtue
Rise above the dirt like me
Satanize another's sins
And plead insanity
Send me another song of your liking,
Invite me along to another place
It doesn't matter, you can't save my face
I'm the coat of your sins you couldn't erase
uh ok this is a good poem but not great, i'm gonna be honest from now on, well from some time ago like when i said hmmmmm :S on one of alevs poems that wasnt so great, and i expect you guys to do the same for me, although others may strongly disagree with me, i dont care i have my own views, but if you like i could just say its amazing even if i dont think it?please tell me (everyone)...
ReplyDeleteso this poem is just good, but i love this part:
"Wouldn't you have whispered
that there's no truth in rumours
Wouldn't you whisper"
Actually I totally prefer you being honest :) that will make your "oohhh it's amazing"-comments so much better, and I will very much appreciate your opinion. Go on like this!
ReplyDeleteI agree with you on this, since I felt when I wrote it that it wasn't that good, but I still am very fond of it. It's one of those pieces that truly connects to my heart even if it is not like, lyrically mindblowing :)
My own favourite part of this song is the "Sugar coat your virtue"-part, cause I think that's the very essence of the song. =)
"Sugar coat your virtue
ReplyDeleteRise above the dirt like me
Satanize another's sins
And plead insanity"
That part is brilliant.. and the voice of the poetry is so strong as I read. Its a very Strong poem, I love how it changes as it progresses but yet stays with the same feeling, beautiful.
ok then :) gald you understand, i just thought no matter how good one is they can still get better, and this way i think we should, and i didnt say its bad i said its good because of the feelings in it i didnt just say its good! :)
ReplyDeleteand you guys will do the same for me right? think of it as revenge x)
Take it easy, amin :D It's better to share your honest opinion, believe me! And you bet I'll be doing the same for you, although I've done it all along, you simply happen to write very good poems :D as do all you guys!
ReplyDeleteHonesty rules!
... and so does potf xD
hah X) they do and so do you guys!
ReplyDeletethanks becca, but i felt one time you really didnt like a poem i wrote, and you didnt say anuthing :D
oh, ooops :( I didn't do that on purpose! But I guess it lies in my nature also, if I'm not sure right away what to comment, I'll rather write nothing, unlike Raves who comments on everything =) No just kidding :D
ReplyDeleteSorry anyway amin! I'll make sure to keep my comments coming whatever content they might have. =)
Sometimes I just cant comment on poetry, depends on my mood, I assume its the same for everyone though it probably isn't... :P
ReplyDeleteDont feel bad about not commenting or not receiving a comment.
It's not about the comments... it's all about the money... ;)
ReplyDeleteoh it is, but the words as spoken by a fan or a friend is worth much more than any amount of golden bricks
ReplyDeleteHahaha, you're right about that! =D
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