Who am I in the eyes of you?
Am I real, when you're looking back at me?
Once I was part of your hunger,
and part of your pain,
I was the sting at your finger
Am I real, would you know?
Even as I passed you by, or told you so
I have a different story than you
I fell with your rain,
I was the stone to drown you
I'm defined by what I sense
Reassured, and in a trance
But I'm never safe in my delusion
I speak to you, in a whisper
Would you tell it from a scream?
Could you tell your whispering memories
From what happened in a dream?
Were you ever real, to me
I'm defined by what I sense
Reassured, and in a trance
But I'm never safe in my delusion
Projected on the world
Who are you, in my eyes?
Are you real, when you're looking back at me?
You're only what I know of you
And what I assign you to be
I'm defined by what I sense
Reassured, and in a trance
But I'm never safe in my delusion
Projected on the world
:) i LOVE this poem.. it mirrors my emotions for those dreams i've had/am having.. i Love how close to home it hits Bekki :D
ReplyDeleteI adore the rhyming in this one (or the absence of rhymes in some parts as well :P ). This is purely interesting, might be cos it's so well written or simply cos of what is said in it. There are some poems out there that just fall to oblivion right after you've read them... This isn't one of them. :)
ReplyDelete"I speak to you, in a whisper
ReplyDeleteWould you tell it from a scream?
Could you tell your whispering memories
From what happened in a dream?
Were you ever real, to me"
One of the purest and the best lines I've read in a while... :D You really blow me with each word of yours..
Well done as always... :D
"Who are you, in my eyes?
ReplyDeleteAre you real, when you're looking back at me?
You're only what I know of you
And what I assign you to be"
this is only few lines I loved in this one but.. this hit hurt. I can´t believe I´m really reading something like this and chating with someone who can write something like this. can´t believe it o.O
hit hard, not hurt :D
ReplyDeleteyour style of using differnet type size really makes certain phrases & ideas jump out at the reader...that being said I like your poety very much. powerful.
ReplyDeleteTruthseeker: Thanks so much, I tend to do that, yes. :D Nice to have you here, welcome! :)
ReplyDeleteRocco: Don't be so impressed, who am I really? Someone who writes, because she needs to deal with what she feels, or it gets too painful and too real. It doesn't take much to write down your angst compared to actually doing something about it. But thank you either way :) It is always an honor to have you here :)
DP, Roosa, thank you :) I'm very moved by both your comments...
Ryan: Yeah this poem kind of means especially much to you and me :/ whether that be good or bad, I couldn't tell.
Phew :D
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